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little princes

by Caligula's Launderette


this is what happens when you read to much Keats...oi vey. still in the refining process...comments appreciated.

CL

little princes dregded in slumber
wake the mind's width and wonder
and in the darkling silent deep
they climb the dreamer's craggy steep

to look o'er the breaking fall
of Hyperion and Shadow's Crawl
to soar above the Journey's End
only to land in sand again

to slap and dash among ravishthieves
to wander and scamper round verdant trees
to cast a light in the SeaHouse grate
venturing towards a Hobbler's fate

to swash and buckle like Musketeers
to scuttle and roar away swifttears
courting the damsels in distress
whispering nightly to venturing Bess
chasing the hounds the green to roam
only to come sluggishly home

sweeping the bedclothes away with the night
here comes the offending light
two bodies stir from languor deep
their tales the sleep to keep


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Thu Jan 14, 2010 11:34 am
july4ruby wrote a review...



hi!
I guess I am not good at reviewing but I'll still try.I liked the topic.I agree with nox that you should change the title.The word were a little hard to understand perhaps because they are not in my vocabulary.The 4th stanza bugged me because all of the stanza's were of of four lines and this was of 6 but I guess I don't have much idea about these things.Anyways I found the poem really nice.

....july...




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Thu Oct 06, 2005 1:42 pm
Nox says...



I love poetry by John Keats.

I lived it though I'm not sure if the title is appropriate for this poem.





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